Edd, I want to tell you in all sincerity and with no blowing of smoke up anyone’s ass that this affected me more than anything I’ve read in a long, long time, much as McCarthy or Hemingway.
Besides the big, powerful stuff, I really like that device you use a couple times where you place a word near the end of a sentence and then start the next sentence with the same word.
“September 19th, Saturday, Camp XCI, enough dawn light to write — Several inches of snow fell in the night. In the night, I had the impression it was warmer, and so it was, if for no more reason than I had a bit more internal heat in those hours.”
“In the distance, I could see little but dark shape against the tundra. Shape alone before I came close enough to distinguish features, even with the field glasses, told me I looked at a musk ox rather than a caribou or a bear.”
I’m not sure if that was an intentional poetic device you used or just a product of your natural voice, but I love it.
Great stuff, man.